Young gun

Its called The uprising. Narrative poetry

Could you please review this work?I entered it for a contest.

Really well one before thought about the population problem and how it affects the poor.

Why do people say their stuff is rubbish so openly? I've come to believe that somehow they feel it "cool" to do so. What do you think?

I think that fairy tales are totally inappropriate for a young kid since it talks about dreams come true and gives them false really underprepares the kid for harsh reality.And ...

7.391. feeling philosophical.nice!

The theme reminds me of something like life is like a moving car on a straight road with no reverse gear . You really do need to make the ocean ...

Good does not always win................I quite forgot about that.I'll see what is possible.But maybe, good looses because people with all heart and no brain fight for it. Really appreciate the ...

Thanks for the reviews people.About the rhyme...........I am still trying to make it sound not forced, something a little hard for me right now.

You really want you're readers to think! This was some unconventional and unique work.The different possibilities you gave make us think about water in so many different ways. You seem ...

This is how a story should be told.....keeping the reader's interest all the time. Great work.Hope to see some something as good or better than this sometime later.

Since I am new to this sort of writing could you please tell me what you thought of this and how I could further improve this.This is not intended to ...

A friend in my class told me.

lukas8u is right.Media can do anything to create a controversy and make breaking news from the most obnoxious, irrelevant facts .

Meaningful is a relative word.How would you explain a tiny cell as meaningful life which cannot comprehend as well as a 5 year old or an adult and has no ...